In this video,
I analyze a student's writing
and show how to turn GOOD sentences into
Here is one of the sentences I analyze:
This figure then rose marginally by just 1000 in 1992, followed by a slight increase to 27,000 in 1997, before falling to 21,000 in 2002, and then increased steadily to almost 30,000 in the final year
Does it seem correct to you? Well, there is a major problem with it.
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Here is another one which is pretty much OK in terms of grammar, but which can also be improved.
Despite a brief drop in the number of visitors from just under 40,000 in 1987 to 30,000 in 1992, this figure increased dramatically to 55,000 in 1997.
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